Describe a setting - Ned

In class we had to do a thing that we went outside a write about what is around me.  Here is my story:

Struggling to walk through the damp grass, ready to get muddy, The yellow and brown leaves sticking to your feet like glue. The clouds ready to flutter its rain to the world. The faint sound of the cars on the highway gives a car person like me joy. I can hear the other students and teachers playing in the gym. The old style buildings behind me full of hard workers. The detoxifying long field gives me hope of fitness. My thoughts in my head ready to burst out.

The old dampened trees cover me from the rain. The taunt of all the leaves on the field give my shoes a hard time to survive from the down pore the night before.grey clouds cover the view of the sky. The sound of nature helps the day of darkness. The hope of a sunny day in otaki leaves my head ever more. The hope of going to the beach soon is slowly fading away for good.

My character description - Bijou

This is my writing. I had to do it for my writing work. I hope you like it.

The chubby cat peered over the edge of the bed. His long fuzzy tail flicked on and off the duvet cover. He was looking at his owner to see if he was awake. The demanding and persistent cat for another way to wake him up. Finally, My owner was awake. Ughh, he's back asleep already. That was what Simon's morning was like.

Simon looks like a fat squishy polar bear. He has a long fuzzy tail. His eyes are as big as a frog's eye. He's got a very cute mouth. He's very cute in general. I guess you could call him a kawaii cat.

He sounds like a baby when he meows. But he has a low, dark and creepy voice when he purrs. When he's angry he'll try and bite you with a crr sound! It's very scary.

Simon loves, like loves, smelling other cat's bum's. It's his way of saying all greetings and questions like hey!, how are you? What's your name? I mean he kind of likes sniffing the outdoors but not that much.

Simon loves touching nice fluffy blankets. He loves couches as well but he rips the thread out most of the time. He loves soft things like blankets and pillows are his favourite.

He loves eating biscuits. Temptation ones are his favourite. Simon doesn't really mind what he eats. He eats anything but he usually gets sick and throws the food back up 😆😨

When Simon's owner doesn't wake up he's thinking Oh my!, Wake up, I'm so so hungry!, Ughhh! Simon really can't be bothered anymore he can't put up with this anymore.

Simon loves being playful. But when he's in a very high play mode watch out he's very dangerous. If Simon doesn't get his way he'll be the most demanding and sassy cat you would've ever seen. When his owner comes back Simon acts innocent and cute.

Finally Simon woke his owner up with a thud of a bat.

Life is cruel - Reece

In class we are working on describing our character and I chose to write about a homeless person. i tried to describe my character so that the reader would connect with him, do you think i have done that

The hungry, homeless human grovels on the dirty ground begging for cash. "The world is cruel" he repeats to himself the world is cruel.

The mysterious male has rugged ripped cargo shorts with a had-it brown top with countless holes. His isolated shoe less feet keep him colder than ever. His big bulging eyes make him look more depressed. The only features on this individual that keeps him warm is his huge hairy beard and his big bushy Afro.

"Get a life loser" or "mum, why is that man sleeping on the ground?" Those are most common for this long gone wreck. He gets abused, kicked and even spat on. "Life is cruel" he says life is cruel